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FIC: Lament

Title: Lament
Characters: Ten and Donna
Spoilers: Planet of the Ood
Author's Notes: Just watched Planet of the Ood. Subsequently committed drabble. So here it is, a tiny h/c missing scene. (Thanks to wendymr  for suggesting a title that worked better.)


“But you can still hear it!” she nearly sobs.

“All the time,” he replies, barely able to hear his own voice through the overpowering song.

It’s too much, too loud. He should turn away, but he can’t. He’s transfixed.

He bows his head until his forehead bangs against the bars. The song fills his mind.

Captivity. Anguish. Despair.

Suddenly, there are hands on his face, pulling him away.

It’s Donna. Why has she put her hands there? She can’t contact his mind this way.

She isn’t trying to. She’s wiping away his tears.

“We’ll help them,” she says resolutely.

“Yes.”

Comments

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wendymr
Apr. 19th, 2008 11:08 pm (UTC)
She’s wiping away his tears.
“We’ll help them,” she says resolutely.
“Yes.”


Beautiful - and that strength through pain is so Donna. I loved the way she initially shrank from the injured Ood and then wanted to do whatever she could to help him.
adaliafic
Apr. 20th, 2008 12:20 am (UTC)
Me, too. She was quick to overcome the fact that the aliens are so... alien. Donna is turning out to be this strange combination of naive and capable, idealistic and practical. In short, she's awesome. ::agrees with your icon::

Glad you enjoyed the drabble, and thanks for commenting! :-)
nightrider101
Apr. 19th, 2008 11:28 pm (UTC)
*sniff* This was gorgeous!

It’s Donna. Why has she put her hands there? She can’t contact his mind this way.

She isn’t trying to. She’s wiping away his tears.


Beautiful writing as always. :) Thanks for sharing this. I could use some comfort after watching that scene!
adaliafic
Apr. 20th, 2008 12:24 am (UTC)
I thought Ten looked like he could, as well. Hence drabble. (Or, I suppose, that might have just been me watching the ep with my trusty h/c-colored glasses.)

Either way, I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for commenting. :-)
dark_aegis
Apr. 19th, 2008 11:50 pm (UTC)
That is absolutely gorgeous. And so very, very Donna. I loved the same lines that Wendy quoted at you, so I won't repeat them. But gorgeous.
adaliafic
Apr. 20th, 2008 12:33 am (UTC)
Thanks you! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :-)
freeze883
Apr. 20th, 2008 12:25 am (UTC)
awwww that was lovely
adaliafic
Apr. 20th, 2008 12:34 am (UTC)
Thank you! :-)
nina_ds
Apr. 20th, 2008 01:14 am (UTC)
I love Donna more and more each week. I really do. This is very much her.
adaliafic
Apr. 20th, 2008 02:38 am (UTC)
I adore her as well! She's turning out to be made of sheer awesome.

Glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for commenting! :-)
nina_ds
Apr. 20th, 2008 02:46 am (UTC)
She's turning out to be made of sheer awesome.

She really is - I was going to give up on DW until she was announced for S4, but she's far exceeding even my expectations.

And, of course, as a musician, I loved the whole musical trope of the episode. Just wish the music had been a bit better, because Gold has done better. /quibble
adaliafic
Apr. 22nd, 2008 07:15 pm (UTC)
I'm going to have to re-watch it with my ears open. The first time around I was way too busy watching Donna running around being awesome and the evil guard guy playing bobbing for Doctors in the container room. :-D
nina_ds
Apr. 22nd, 2008 10:52 pm (UTC)
I really think someone's been watching Toy Story in the writer's room - repeatedly. I couldn't quite believe we got two Toy Story call-outs so close together. Maybe unintentional, but seems awfully coincidental!
honorh
Apr. 20th, 2008 06:32 am (UTC)
Lovely. Donna asking to hear the song and then not being able to bear it made a great scene; this addendum feels like it slots right in with it.
adaliafic
Apr. 22nd, 2008 07:18 pm (UTC)
It's just what I saw happening after they cut away from Ten's face at the end of that scene. Donna was so compassionate and he looked so resigned and a little bit overwhelmed.

I'm glad you like it! Thanks for commenting. :-)
(Anonymous)
Apr. 20th, 2008 04:58 pm (UTC)
Brilliant! I loved that scene in the episode, and your drabble did it full justice.

Donna is simply wonderful, and she and the Doctor make for a perfect team together. The depth of understanding she has was shown last week when she helped the Doctor pull the lever that was to destroy Pompeii, and affirmed again this week. You really payed homage to this in this drabble.

In having the Doctor cry in this little piece, you also allowed a very real moment of h/c - he was near tears in the actual episode, so your drabble really fits in, and is very acurate, emotionally. It's somehow very subtle, this moral, emotional aching you portrayed. The Doctor's compassion and empathy becoming too much to bear, only for him to be rescued by Donna's compassion and empathy. That's what friends are for :-)

Best,
Valentina
adaliafic
Apr. 22nd, 2008 07:24 pm (UTC)
He looked so close to tears when that scene ended, and then when we see them again they're both standing and looking composed, so we know a little moment or two of time has passed in between. My mind automatically fills in little missing moments like that with H/C, and thus you get drabbles like this one.

The Doctor's compassion and empathy becoming too much to bear, only for him to be rescued by Donna's compassion and empathy. That's what friends are for.

I couldn't have said it better. Donna is turning out to be a friend he can rely on.

Thanks for reading and commenting! :-)
(Anonymous)
Apr. 22nd, 2008 10:13 pm (UTC)
"He looked so close to tears when that scene ended, and then when we see them again they're both standing and looking composed, so we know a little moment or two of time has passed in between."

You know, I hadn't thought of it that way. Makes perfect sense.

"My mind automatically fills in little missing moments like that with H/C, and thus you get drabbles like this one."

Then I guess we're all grateful for the way your mind works :-)

Val
adaliafic
Apr. 24th, 2008 02:48 pm (UTC)
As long as folks enjoy reading the end result, I'm happy. :-)
catsfiction
Apr. 21st, 2008 05:22 pm (UTC)
It’s Donna. Why has she put her hands there? She can’t contact his mind this way.

She isn’t trying to. She’s wiping away his tears.


A beautiful little scene. You capture her hands-on, compassionate practicality so perfectly and your pared-down style is a treat to read.
adaliafic
Apr. 22nd, 2008 07:29 pm (UTC)
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :-)
bulky_monster
Apr. 23rd, 2008 12:41 am (UTC)
Very sweet, and I think it was needed.

I confess I read this before I saw the episode.
adaliafic
Apr. 24th, 2008 02:43 pm (UTC)
I'm glad you liked it, and thanks for commenting! :-)
hence_the_name
May. 29th, 2008 08:22 pm (UTC)
This is really lovely. You capture Donna's steadfastness and compassion beatifully in very few words. And, as others have mentioned, it slots right in with the episode. Thanks for this!
adaliafic
May. 29th, 2008 08:35 pm (UTC)
I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for reading and commenting. :-)
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